Ext.Bus stop.Morning.
CHARLEY sits at the bus stop and watches the cars go by. BILLIE sits down beside her and sighs before beginning to talk.
BILLIE
You know were really close friends and...
CHARLEY
And...?
BILLIE
Well... Okay... Let’s say you know something about someone and that someone happens to be something very important to one of your best friends, what would you do would you tell the person and risk breaking their heart or would you keep quiet and hope the situation dies down and goes away...
CHARLEY looks at BILLIE confusingly but still doesn’t get what BILLIE is trying to say.
CHARLEY
BILLIE are you trying to tell me something?
BILLIE
No, well ermm... No.
CHARLEY looks at BILLIE suspiciously.
CHARLEY
You know you can tell me if there is?
BILLIE thinks about things for a minute before starting to talk.
BILLIE
You know at the party yesterday when you fell asleep on the sofa...
CHARLEY
Yeah...
BILLIE
Well, I was drunk and this other person was drunk and
Well we started talking and kissed.....
CHARLEY smiled, not realising what she means by that.
CHARLEY
Awww BILL, so who is this mystery guy?
BILLIE looks to the floor.
BILLIE
Well I truly didn’t realise who I was talking to until after it had happened and you know I would never do anything like this, it was purely because I was drunk. Promise you won’t get angry promise.
CHARLEY frowns, starting to put two and two together and stares straight into BILLIES eyes
Charley
Spit it out, who was it.
BILLIE
It was...
BILLIE looks to the floor again and tears begin to fall down her face.
BILLIE
It was...BOB
CHARLEY looks at BILLIE and slaps her straight across the face.
CHARLEY
You...YOU traitor! I thought we were friends but all along you have been behind my back going out with my boyfriend! Whats wrong can’t find a boyfriend for yourself so you have to take mine!
BILLIE holding her face after the shock of the slap.
BILLIE
It was never like that CHARLEY, never it was intended. It just sort of happened, really trust me.
CHARLEY
I will never trust you again never, friend... You will never ever again be no friend of mine!
CHARLEY takes out phone and begins to dial a number.
BILLIE
Who are you calling?!
CHARLEY
Not that it’s any of your business, but I’m calling BOB. I think it’s time we see what really happened that night, when you and him went behind my back...and to think I ever trusted you, to think I used to trust you with everything and used to call you my BESTFRIEND!
CHARLEY begins to talk on mobile.
CHARLEY
Hello, we need to meet now! No this can’t be sorted on phone! Come now. Bye.
BILLIE stares at CHARLEY.
CHARLEY
What you looking at. Come with me.
BILLIE
Where we going?
CHARLEY ignores BILLIE.
BILLIE
I said where we going?!
CHARLEY continues to ignore BILLIE and sticks her hand out for the bus.
EXT. Park. Morning.
CHARLEY looks around before seeing BOB sitting on a bench in an empty side of the park.
CHARLEY
Come, now.
CHARLEY and BILLIE walk towards BOB.
BOB
Hey girls, how can I be of assistance?
BILLIE looks down.
CHARLEY
Oh, I just thought that you wanted to have a chat with your girlfriend...
BOB signals for CHARLEY to come and sit with him.
CHARLEY
Not me... Her.
CHARLEY pushes BILLIE down to sit with BOB.
CHARLEY
Oh look what an happy couple.
BOB looks at CHARLEY confusingly.
BOB
What are you on about CHARLEY, your my girlfriend! You know that, what makes you think that she’s my girlfriend!?
BILLIE gives BOB an evil glance.
BILLIE
Actually the girl your calling SHE has a name!
CHARLEY
Shut up, both of you! I know your little secret from the party! How could you do this to me BOB! I thought you loved me!
BOB
CHARLEY you know it was never supposed to happen it was an drunken moment, an accident! I love you CHARLEY and wouldn’t ever do this to you! It just happened char believe me.My comment:
My work is unfinished at this momment, but think I done well to keep to the rules like names in capitals and allignment even though on this Blog it doesn't come up like it does on the actual word process (However, sir knows about this.) Working process....
Great script. You have used the correct formatting. You have used the right indents to show the difference between the action and the dialogue. All character names have been written in capitals and there are directions for the characters in brackets.
ReplyDeleteYour slug lines are correct - showing where and when the action occurs.
Do you think you could do anything to make this better? Do you think you have included enough information about the ACTION that takes place? Instead of just lots of dialogue?
Distinction
Mr Monahan
I think to improve I could add more action instead of just dialogue.
ReplyDeleteAlso this script looks really messy and everythings is all over the place however I have corrected this and fixed that.